This was good, I mean an example some little kiddies running around should look at.
Gotta love the sleepers...oh wait, no you don't. Can't believe I'm the first to say something.

"Where you can cry a river that’ll get washed away by anger’s tides" - That was really good,

"But the congregation is made up of drug fiends and teenage mothers" - Saddly its true.

"And God answers back 'Don’t worry, son, I can’t see that love’ll grow" - You had forshadowing through out, some of which wasn't all that pronounced (which is good), and that line there, is so blatent, but on the other hand "son" doesn't necessarily mean ones 'son'.

"And proved that forbidden fruit always tastes so much better" - Give me an Amen! So true, great line.

Overall, Knucks great work. A really good story idea. Quite original.