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Originally posted by Bruklor
basically wanted to keep it simple...or something like that..
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and that you did brovah!
anyway, this was a nice piece. The emotion made it, theres no doubt about that. Your flow was a bit off, but for something written in class, that can be expected.
I know what you mean about the love.
I'm feeling about the same way right now.
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It took God 7 days to make life, I haven’t even started and I’m 17-
One day, maybe, please, I will spread my seed, and hope he or she is better than me-
That’s my golden wish, one which I fish the sea for-
Cuz that’s where I was told there were plenty more-
It must’ve been a fib, I’ve sunk to its floor-
I tried to do what God did-
And now I only have 12 ribs-
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it is sad that that didn't flow. if it did, it would possibly have been one of the best verses I've ever read. in terms of content, it is.
it is amazing.
I really can't say anything more than that.
this is some good fucking writing.
Peace