wow, the poetry man with an open mic...it's like christmas! lol
this was great content. it had that poetic feel to it. because you're deacon o.O
your wordplay and metaphors were insane, and the flow was fairly good too.
best lines:
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For the allowance of such beauty with even evil intuition we ignore our filial duty--You generate the light despite the measures that add to nothing
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I loved the content of that bar, but it didn't rhyme. whats up with that? i guess slug does it all the time. phucker.
you need to work on bar length. it leads to impeccable flow, hell, look at sand. his shit always flows perfect, and the end of his bars are straight as a ruler. Also, try not to have wordplay that is so deep that it's hard to get anything from. It may mean the world to you, but if I don't get it, then it's not a very good read.
Very nice work, d-man
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