Flow was ok, nothing special as i read it, it had basic internals but by now - you should be stepping it up my man. . add some multi's into your pieces, your rhyming is too basic one-syllable rhyming, emotion was its strongest factor, thats where you shone. Im not hating - i just feel i need to tell you where to strengthen up, you need more multi's and internal-multi's to become dope, right now its only your emotion and imagery thats setting you above average.

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