mediocre, not tryna put u down or nuttin cuz u had some tight lines in there but heres what u need to work on - vocab, dont worry almost everyone on this site needs work on that including me, multis, more rhyming wouled help, and stay on 1 topic readers liked to be amused by the way you show a certain topic or they like to be interested in what ur writing about but when u write about nothing readers dont find that a good read, good luck 1

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