vocab-was aight
wordplay-could improve (catching the ball is my only wish, deeze guys will be after me like a bunch of fish.....has potential, but u need to word it differently...)
Catching the ball is my only wish, these fat gay guys'll be afta me like a french guy serving a side dish <- - - stretched, but sounds better then a bunch of fish...why would fish be after you in football?

Anyways i thought it was aight for a new guy....just keep your head up and keep writin....peace

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