I think this would of been very nice on audio because you in typed out al theeffects and i saw where you was coming from, your lines could of been even out a bit so the flow was a bit better and beter structure...

blahblahblahblahrhyme
blahblahblahblahrhyme

but even if every line doesn't rhyme it don't matter

blahblahblahblahblah
blahblahblahblahrhyme
blahblahblahblahblah
blahblahblahblahrhyme

The concept was nice...and some good lines...