i like how you tried to complex the content up, added some high syallable and technical words:

the life cycle of the prophets first son/ emotions are perplexed daily drama seems fun/
routine for a schziophrenic/ death threats guns and mans actions creates a new synthetic/ times ended for another niggas life/ detectives at his residence breakin the news to his wife/

are you a fan of cormega? cos its like you influenced by him, i can see if for some reason in your rhymes, thats prob a good thing,

the structure and flow is prob the weakest thing, but if you improve that i think you got mad potential...good spittin...

peep my spit "let loose"