yo i ain't seen to many femcees so good lookin on the spits, aight to the actual drop,

it was kinda simplistic like he said, but if its one of the first spits, it ain't like you will drop nas stuff straight away,

i think you tellin a story/topic on here, so that shows you creative, and thats a good thing, cos you ain't on that "gangsta" shit that bores me to death,

Look at me i thought that you were my friend/
I didnt think that our thug lovin would come to an end/
When i was just a young girl, only 13/
You got it on with my boyfriend, nigga he split the scene/
But i forgave you for that, i thought i'd better be nice/
But it didnt stop you, from doing it twice/

see the structure, if you make the lines more similair in size e.g if i adjust a line to show you:

When i was just a young girl, hittin the age of 13/
got it on with my boyfriend, the nigga split the scene/

or something like that, i can't think at the minute properly, but you see how it flows bit better,

it also looks structured. the content was aight, a lil basic, when you drop again try and introduce more complex words, or extend you vocab on the rhyming words, and that will make it improve loads, but good spittin, reppin the girl ting, KEEP DROPPIN

peep my spit "LET LOOSE"...peace