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lol...uppin man..i'll give you some sympathy feed....
aight this was ok,
you structure is very good, flows is good enough, but the wordplay, content etc was kinda basic:
i caused some shit now i got a week down here in solidarity/
confined to the thoughts in my own mind i'm a lose sanity/
random ripples of wicked thoughts headaches i wish it'd stop/
remember the first time i got into serious trouble with a cop/
13 yrs old being stupid wanted to play basketball late night/
so i broke into the arena and was gonna play until it got light/
the 2nd and 3 rd lines are good, but the rest is really basic content and wordplay wise light with night, cop with stop, there was nothin in the drop that showed you got a good vocab or high ability,
overall it was a solid enough drop, basics are almost sorted, you got much room to improve and elevate, but keep spittin and you could have it....
PEEP MY SPIT "LET LOOSE".....PEACE
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