The emotional aspect was the stronghold of this piece, you really tried to express how you felt, the topics been done many a time but each ones unique, because people tend to express how they feel differently each time, i didnt like flow to this, it was real choppy, more internals and multi's would of helped improve that a lot, i didnt like it towards the end of the piece, you seemed to go on some trip about you being wonderful and that you were too good for him to have - talk about ego's! Hahaha, anyways, it did seem more poetic than anything, flow could use work, nothing really stood out as i read it apart from its emotional aspect, that was dope.

All in all not a bad piece, you could use work, but practice makes perfect, just keep at it, try writing to other topics to give yourself some versatility, add more multi's and internals into your rhyme scheme, try to keep the lines roughly between 12-16 syllables per line. Just a few words of advice.

Eace-Pay!

Oh - Reply To Mine Feat. Abolish = )

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