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Old 09-15-03, 10:20 PM   #11
Aisle Phive
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ill break this down bar by bar, as fair as possible.

Forget the facts you've gathered, Mentally Kursed's a typical gay man
He "tackles" and "sacks" men better than the NFL's Michael Strahan

ehh ok.. ill give this 6/10

Mentally Kursed must be a "verb" cuz he's on my "to do" list for eliminating herbs
He's checking readers digest to make sure I aint stealing text cuz he's eatin my words

second line was confusing, first was ok, 6/10

Ya verse'll be far from perfect, even beneath the surface is bland
What the purpose of comin hard in verses if ya idol is megaman?

lmao, nice personal 9/10

I'm like Kazaa and kidde porn, on the computer... I'm nothing to mess with
Fuck a friendship, only way "i'm your "dog" is if you're dsylexic

wasnt feelin it, 5/10

To boot I got the lyrical heat you can't stop it, blaze a trail like Rasheed Wallace
And I'm quick to shoot, like NYPD cathing black men reaching for their wallets

pretty nice 8/10

overall- a good verse with a few nice punchlines, i was feelin it though...

34/50

Repeatedly eatin fruit loops is the only time he consecutive kill, commit color suicide by overdosin on purple pills//
Your from Bermy, this cereal killer robs “banks for sperm” givin him a reason to steal//

lol... solid punch 7/10

Punches separate your jaw from your mouth and your heart from your chest//
Put you to rest, sendin “books” through your stomach so youll have “readers digest”//

very good wordplay, not much of a punch but very nice bar, 8/10

Your flow dont make sense like Helen Keller judgin a dance contest//
Like Cams the best, ill leave your chest caved in like Bin Ladin and terrorists//

LOL made me laugh, and im not in a good mood so thats hard 2 do right now, 7/10

Ill rip your face off they lay it on a ELEVATor so you can have a face lift//
Hits quick and swift, disperse a bullet through your brain so your thoughts shift//

pretty good pretty good, 7/10

Yours fists connectin is a illusion, punches leave you wit delusion, bruises on your face//
Your blood is on my fists, callin C.S.I to match the trace and the F.B.B. to solve the case//

whats the FBB? good setup bar and lost me on the second line. 6/10

35/50


damn that was some close shit.. its almost impossible to make a decision, both verses were very tight, and its down to the last point. MK wins by one point. he had a more consistent verse, he only had one or two that stood out, and cam had some good punchlines, but had some confusing bars and lacked consistency.

i broke this down as much as possible.

vote-Mentally Kursed

hit this up honest, no DR BS..

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=79874
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