although i'm not sure who did what verse... i liked them both so i guess i'll just critique it as a whole... the flow in the first verse wasn't as good as the second, but still worked... vocab was good, pro'lly even with second verse... i liked the wordplay in the second verse better... eg "my time slips through cold hands on the digital clock".... <----that was genious.. lol... all together... i liked it ... 1...

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