i like how you flipped between both perspectives...........touchy topic i'm surprised no one said anything about the "violent aspect" of this.............real shit happens every day.............hope you are not writing from experience if you are my condolences and don't worry everything eventually heals.................this piece need no fixing up no suggestions to be better..........it is perfect as is the flow is nicer than i would expect this being such an emotional piece its hard to rhyme when you are upset...........great drop i look foward to your future work..........1