You new to writing? This here was okay. Some of the lines I liked, some I thought were okay and some I didn't really care for. You stayed on topic, I guess. That was a good thing about it. But you didn't really get into much detail. That's what stopped me from liking it a lot. The last 2 lines is the ones I liked a lot. Definately true..

Just keep on writing. You'll get better. Go into more detail next time. Give the reader a better description so they can feel what you're saying.