iight

they were pretty good poems, although i felt they could have had more too them

the first one i didnt expect to end there, it just stopped, i felt like it was just chopped off, you started a story and didnt finish it, and if that was the whole story then you should have made more too it, by using your emotions more

the second one i too thought was the better one but the same as before, keep it going, if you've got something good keep writing, may take awhile before you get more down thats goes, but it will come k.

i think i liked the better one more coz as said most ppl can relate more to the second one, then the first

also work on your vocab, and on getting your message throu

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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