aiyo... kinda keep your bars even for structure, but dont give up your rhyme scheme...
another thing... when your text battling, cats wanna see some vocabulary and some well thought out bars... so just try to put more shit on one line... make it more complex...
this peice wasnt bad... but it could use some work...

checkk my peice called "whats yo deal girl??? (keystyle)"
peace homie,
A.T.