this piece was good...you had some nice vocab and you stuck to the subject well...it also had good flow...the only thing I'd say you need to work on is ya multi'z...I seen that you only be rhymin' one word...you should try to rhyme like 2 or more wordz...it makez ya shit sound a whole lot better...holla...

oh yeah...and can ya peep my latest open mic?????? it's called Behind Barz...I just finished it tonight and ain't nobody seen the 3rd verse yet...