you vocab was weak..you structure was coo...your wordplay was not good...and one of the contrabutions to such failure was stuff like this

Long before i was obsessed, with the world of the rap game, the world of Tupac/
Before it didnt really matter if you were white or black/

listen to how ya end rhyme sounds...black and tupac...the anunciation on both words dont match....get it?...(and so what if i spelled anunciation wrong)

Before i got into drugs, before i was hunted down by the law/
Before i became so drunk i just lay on the floor/

same with this....law and floor...have nooooo rhyme what-so-ever....

you had a flow then you lost it in the piece...when i mean flow...EVERYTHING...EVERY line has to almost transition from one to another..

it just looks like some of your lines were just started over on a different flow...

keep reading...keep studying you'll get it eventually...


igido

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