camarac said it best multis and internals would help, but you've got that emotion thing down, sometimes when you're coming from the heart you don't worry about making you rhyme scheme complex and different you say the words that get your point across. the flow isn't that bad and i caught what you meant by its not really fast but it is a little quick. if you revamped this made your thoughts a little more precise this would be a dope audio drop. good drop.