"goin to bed at night fearin of gettin raped or even slaughterd//
what makes it worse, what if it was even ya own father//"
^thas some disturbing shit... deep...
this was aight... I got respect for what you was talking bout... I wasn't really feeling that flow though, made kinda simple but thas aight... don't need to be too complex...
Keep working at it, play around with the rhyme scheme and shit... might help you get better...

Peace

And about this one...