I have to agree with cam and cyanide. the flow was real choppy could use some work, vocab was alright as for structure and wordplay.... well that could use work to, so basically just play around with it. try usin some different words and what not and try not to rhyme or repeat with the same word unless u got somethin to go with it right afterwards to continue the flow. so juss kep practicin at it man. peace

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