I have to agree with cam. I thought this was a decent peice and definetly would make a better audio then text. but there is one thing. I couldn't really get at what u were rapping about. Like I can't really tell if ur like mad at the world or mad at life or just throwin some shit out I dunno but other then that ur vocab is good, u had a more then decent rhyme scheme and the whole thing flowed nice. so keep it up and next time try to rap about a certain topic and stay with it. no offence or nuttin just giving a suggestion.

and by the way. check out mine and masta C's open mic called "life is what we hate (ft. Masta C)" and also keep an eye out for our newest open mic which I will be postin sometime today called "High Times" which will also be featuring masta C and remember to leave some feedback. thanx in advance. peace.

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