Yeah, this was pretty decent for how short it was, the flow was there, good use of multi's, it could of used more internal rhyming i felt, maybe some imagery and depth would of improved this, try aiming for an actual topic piece instead of a "Bragging Writes" pieces where its only about you being god like.
Overall though it was ok, nothing really standout but you have the basics down, just need work.
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