Thread: THE GOD(omen#1)
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Old 09-22-03, 09:49 AM   #5
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nice read as usual
vocabulary was outstanding the structure worked well within the topic
the beginning of the verse was really tight...

'I'll make your brains take flight like a sparrow-
see an army of militant pharoahs-dethroned by an aramada of primitive arrows.
my mind is a weapon-in seven-i serve blessens, sever revrens, and enemies atop the heavens.
then decend them-while they souls acenden-with another eleven
^like it

and some funny imagery thrown in
shame its being slept on
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