Not bad bro, original topic to work with, you stayed on point throuout, i didnt really like the opener cause that was the weirdiest rhyme ive ever seen, but aside from that it wasnt bad, good use of multi's and internal rhyming, strong writers voice, you really directed this piece how you wanted, i didnt really like the i dont belong here nonscence but aside from that it was good.

Guess who's back in the mothafuckin house?
half black, half white chick i call her minnie mouse!

LMMFAO!

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