you do have some potential...but you need to structure your rhymes better, instead off
xxxxx xxxx xxxxx A
xxxxx xxxx xxxxx A

use

xxxxx A xxxxxx A
A xxxxxx xxx xxxxxx A

[A being the rhymin word)

anyway:
You did show that you changed style, the first being slow and laid back, the 2nd being fast, and upbeat. You ceratinly have a good VOCAB, not much in the need of improving there, and your WORDPLAY was good too:
"Why does god punish the good with deaf muteness, speach impediments why//
my life is like biggie albums I was born again now i'm ready to die//" - dope....

We all can relate to these types of pieces, ut try to keep the content on the topic, but you did do well..

OVERALL: 7/10, was nice, touch it up here and there, but big props.