lmao^
faggots

a pretty good piece here
time is a subject which has been done quite alot but always seems to come out unique from the different ppl who write it
the first four lines were really good especially the first two
set the tone for the rest...
a few cliches took away from it in parts..but both stayed on topic
flow was solid
prefered the first paragraph from the rest althopugh it picked up towards the end
capped it off with a decent finish though
two distinct styles...prefered the first one overall but still a good read