I personally didn't think the rhyme scheme was all that rigid. Of course I sort of just zoned out when reading this, and I didn't read it proper I just went with the flow.

I don't know if it was intentional or not, but at the very beginning there was an interesting peice of imagry. Sort of about a child being born and being totally innocent and naive. And then you start talking about wars and stuff, and when you have an image of an innocent child in your head, it starts to make a larger and more clear image altogether. I really liked that.

Much respect.

~Shalom~

__________________

Quote:

Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.