how do you say witty......i like the plot twist the vocab didn't seem too forced just a little uneven.......great example of story telling......had me thinking you were going somewhere else with the story though.......this was dope coulda been better.....mostly needed to be a little longer i wanna see how this shit turns out but good drop...


straight newbie move here:
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81436