^you just need to keep at, i was wacky when i first started rappin, but just keeping at it and rappin' everyday, and you'll break the shell^

Overall the piece wasn't the ebst, but as you said your newb, so it wasn;t bad from that perspective. The following lines were dope though:

"So be it, I come to terms to accept facts/
It's stranger than fiction, Funn spits fire (STEP BACK!)/
There's no delay between my brain an my tounge/
the only dilemma is weed decaying my lungs/
gotta be 'BAD' coz the 'GOOD' die young/
My flow like a killah B, an you just been stung/ " - i know thats like 1/2 the piece, but it was good.

You have mad potential, i wanna see you keep coming here and wanna see you elevate mos def. Up your vocab, although it was o.k for a newb, also use a more complicated rhyme scheme.

nice though