Yeah, this was pretty good my man, flow was its strongpoint, good rhyme scheme / structure, the vocab was pretty good, i thought it got better towards the end, the beginning didnt really have the content that the bottom verse had, there was a few lines that stoodout, mainly because of the emotion or imagery behind them, i liked this:
….::::Ive taken the beatings and returned the favor with a smile
Cause to give into this pyle of filth I was given isnt my style
and the line about `arms stretched to the moon. .` you just need to ditch all the periods and stuff before each line to pause for flow, they get annoying after a while, but all in all this wasnt a bad piece, i havent read one of yours ina long time, but props.

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