Dopeness trill. .
damn, your opening bar to the first verse was a killer, good use of multi's and internals, really much like my style actually, lol. Good rhyme pattern, kept switching it up, that held my interest a lot actually, loved the abstract ness, `rawkus` line was worded dope, and this
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Servent with that pitfall stomach sergent snake eyed serpent,
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^ Kinda fresh, not many kids try for illitertaion in pieces now, but i loved that, nice one my man!
Nice finish to the first verse with the 'fucking president' line, that was pretty hard hitting, strong writers voice and flow.
Hook was a nice touch to this piece actually, i liked how you flipped the opening line with the ending one, that was pretty cool, i liked it = )
Ooo0oo0oh, opener to verse two caught me offguard, pretty dope, good word choice there, liked this one:
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70 percent religious, 5 percent prestigious, 2 points fridges,
another 3 is broken bridges, half of the rest is a scrimmage
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^ Prolly my fave bar from this piece actually, really stood out. Ending bar was cool too, all in all you came through on this, very abstract, as i like, good use of multi's / internals / flow and original topic, which is just dope.
All in all a great piece, props my man!