This is my second time writing an open-mic....

I am trying to take on a new style so I want peoples opinions on this.........If you think its wack....tell me what to improve on etc.

If you think its dope........Great .....But please be honest

Uh,these sacred scriptures
Remain playin' in your brain like Holocaust pictures
Slayin' the airwaves with raps
Amplified by hater-stricture
Spittin' slick rhymes designed to quickly hit-ya
Leavin' ya disfigured like that Mister Mister
Blessed with an evil demeanor
That'd make the Grim Reaper
Jump outta his seat with fear from my lyrical-feature
Im Bringin' the heat from beneath ya
I guess that oughta teach ya
Not to fuck me,the evilest of elite creatures

It may seem unfinished but just give me your views on those 12 lines