^Did you not read the begging of the thread?.He said it was his first or second time making a open mic,plus you've got like four posts.Anyway here is some feedback for ya man....
This was a decent piece like Bash said above,the line about The Haulocost was really creative.But your vocab was below level.Try some wordplay and some more metties,and try to format your verse a little better.There were some flaws in this open mic,like this one:

^^Weak like Bash said before.Plus you never want to end a line with the same word as before,it makes u seem like you have a small vocabulary and that your struggling on words.
Overall
it was a decent piece...keep dropping
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