Cam- Beat is waaay too low. But I can tell your sort of offbeat. Lower your vocals and back from the mic a bit. Too much reverb. Delivery needs work. Sounds like you're just reading it really. Lyrics were nice. I can tell you're new to audio. Overall it was decent. I won't call it a dope first attempt cuz you need a lot more practice but it was decent.

Dez- Monotoned as fuck. Sounds like you didn't even want to do this. Very offbeat. Vocals are too lowd. This is just bad mixing. Step away from the mic when you spit and you'll take away those breaths on the mic. I can tell you're new. Just work on delivery and emotion. And try to write the flow directly to the beat.

Overall- This was ok. You two need to practice a lot more. Get a beat and rip it for a couple days. Just rock it and then switch to a new beat and rock that one for a few days. Trust me this will help the flow a lot. And try to come more hyped. Act like you wanna actually do the track. Pz.

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Robert L. Rem
1986-2003