I liked this, good flo and character work, but the topic matter was a little skewed
This didn't seem all that deep on the surface, but after a second read I could reveal all types of metaphors
I thought I saw sum weed references,lol
"Mary-Jane your more precious than the air that i breath
You leave my thoughts senseless so im unable to leave"
and the whole waiting for spiderman fictional love thing I related to false hope and infactuation
nice piece