It was decent, flow was ok but it was really basic, only the externals rhymed and when they did it was like. . one syllable rhyming which i didnt like. The topic was kinda jkihgop as in, didnt make sense, it was yet another *sigh* "Bragging Writes" piece, wtf at 'had some nice punches' NO - IT DID NOT! Do you kids actually know what punches are? Overall it was decent, a little basic, flow could use a lot of work,m get a decent topic that includes imagery or emotion instead of a random piece like this one.

You have potential, just try and come up with something more creative.

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