2hot2handle-don't freepost in your thread. and don't sway votes. and don't be a poor sport. this is all for fun, so if you're going to be a dick about time's and dates and all that you can just screw off.

now, on the positive side of things, I'm going to critique you both.

2hot-Your verse had a lot of good content. The flow wasn't very good, and I thought there were a few lines that didn't rhyme, so you need to work on that. The random similes and metaphors were a really nice touch, because you connected thing that I didn't think had any connection. Overall, theres room for improvement, but it was still pretty good.

LRS- damn. this was pretty nice man, your into was rather hilarious. Theres the flow issue here too. People will tell you that flow isn't important in a topical, but thats a filthy lie. Flow is always important. Your metaphors were incredibly nice. There was a lot of insight in this verse and it still made pretty good sense. Your closer killed it.

vote: LaRyanShabaz

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