all the WHY WHY WHY got kinda repetative
but before i start tellin ur weakness in this
but this is a really dope conept and orignal
apporach to this, i give u props for that.....

didnt flow at all,
bar structre was weak
didnt fit well at alll
this would be really
dope if u re wrote it all
to make it actually flow properly
and to make it a decent piece
i mean u got a dope idea
just use it properly mate