Very nice and peaceful ballad type of drop. I liked the imagery and I was even able to hear a Kid Rock type of harmony to it. Well done. You obviously have been doing this awhile. Only critique, like the other fellow said, is your vocab. It could have been more complex, but really, I'm feeling complexity wasn't what this was about or what you wanted with this piece. You were telling a story and a nice one at that. Keep it up, but I guess you don't need me to tell you that.