Camarac
This is the first opportunity I had to read something of this sort that you have authored . It certainly encompassed a totally different tone and style, for that matter . It was decent, right up to the last line and *POOF! A gem-of-a-line, though not well-placed, left me awe-stricken. Personally, I feel that the line would be more suitable towards the middle of your writing, but I guess a proper structure would depend on the eye of the beholder - ya'know? I liked the poetic vibe that commenced the piece in the hook-esque first seven lines. What is your SoundClick address, by the way?

I'm about to lose connection . . So I may have to finish the latter half of this later, sorry.



*: A more suitable word/part-of-speech could be substituted for "POOF!" to enhance my bewilderment @ the aforementioned line.

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