Eye Dios. . This piece popped with vocabulary, wordplay, imagery etcedra. Obviously, you sufficed to satisfy my literary needs - in every aspect, too. However, you seem to have sacrificed some content in order to adapt to a seemingly 'intelligent' style. This seems to be the polar opposite of what I've seen you write in SS & Co. I feel you need to find the middle ground between the two, if you know what I'm saying. .

I guess the enviromentally symbolistic theme was thought-provoking. I picked up on a few pieces of word-play & other hidden gems. . But I feel as if (as you eluded to in your reply on my piece) the "dictionary-esque" style fits better with a witty piece. I suggest you write about something you feel strongly about, for it is easy to dictate your passion in a witty manner.

I don't know if you follow what I'm saying, if you have any questions - don't hesitate to get me on AIM. G'Luck .

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