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Old 09-30-03, 10:30 PM   #4
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I think you struggled to keep it cohesive....
Though there definitely is some ill rhymin...
hmmm all in all i suggest toning down the vocab a notch in favour of making the entire work "more accessible"...
not to say that you should pimp your script out to that flow flavour of the day...

Keep it real fgee
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