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Old 10-01-03, 01:10 AM   #3
WeRd-smith
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Its possibe in any shape or form when candles
were lit at both ends,
Flags raised for a snowstorm persevreance.


^my god that is fucking dope, those who don't get it don't deserve to.
I'm glad you wrote a song from this, i loved the wordplay, I couldn't catch the flow at first then I got it , reread the piece and it was smooth as hell

Rejoice angel,many awaited your arrival to
rework the angles.
Fallen wingman takes on many forms but the
strong cant mental strangle.


the entire piece had an underlying spiritual theme to it but this was not as subtle as other parts.

Scream phoenix,once the chains are broken you shall
Expand your wingtips.
Emotion sickness might set in but with perscriptions it
Can be extinguished.


the beginning is ill because it fits the theme so well. also a great way to start off a "topical" piece. sort of an emcee/poet rising out of the ashes to do bigger and better things. seemed a little personal to me

Okay..meloncholy movements in tune with this
Concrete jungles slithering snakes that quiver
And quake..never noticed but ill be sure to put
On my state, as a nomad..godzilla juckie gonads
Crewless now unconfuse it,


you don't structure your verses in the conventional way which is probably why most say your stuff dosen't flow or whatever. really they are just to lazy to read through and find the flow on their own. you are one of the better writers on this board and i give you your props..
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