Yeah, this was real simple, short and to the point, i didnt really like the topic, its a little played to be honest and been done many a time before, flow was there for the most part, it got a lottle choppy towards the body of the verse but not too much, vocab could of been a little better, id of prefered more structure in the rhyme scheme rather than just the externals rhyming but it wasnt too bad.

Eace-Pay!

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