this was actually alright my man
at first glance i didnt think it was very good...but it was decent
flowed well thru the most part and was short but enjoyable


Restless at night Can't sleep But I dream in the day
Breathless from fright Hands weak You never seen it my way
^sets the tone..decent opener
The pheonix'll play But I don't want to Cuz I envy his wings
It's a known fact that grudges haunt you So my enemies sing
^..liked the imagery here
If I got a penny for things I thought I'd most likely be rich
I threw my dreams away Ther weren't caught Real life's my wifey A bitch
^..liked the first line..second didnt seem to flow very well.chopped the flow
She didn't like me She ditched So now I try to escape
But I can't So I wait If only I had wings Or even a cape
^...avergae line..didntreally create an impact
I feed from the bait But I'm still hungry Cuz it's from reality
Sometimes I wanna jump without the bungee Tired of Burger King and AppleBees
^hmm...seem to have gone off track...maybe i just dont understand it
You never heard of me A casualty With deep thoughts on my head
Some dreams are realer than actuality They leave spots on my bed
^i thought that was funny...maybe it wasnt meant to be
Plots are misread Im tired of being at ground level Different deceptions
If only wings could be hired I could see from a distant perception
^good bit of thought provoking
The question If Only I could fly Without missin' the plot
If I could fly Shit I'd probably wish I could walk......
^yeh u always want what u cant have or cant do kinda thing..good ender

still room for improvement.mainly in the vocab and flow areas