first off...

your bars are waaaay to long, split them in two,..

Your flow hover was off da chain, you amde good use of your knowledge of internals, and you played them out well, well spread out..nice!

You had nice wordplay here too, with lines like:
"like a flawed diamond i cannot claim to be perfect as you cannot see right through me,

times ticking i've been sleeping for years dreams of a rap career are in slow motion/
can i fast forward and pause my devotion or will tha alarm awaken me with just a notion/"

you had glittering vocab here dawg, vocabed up! - as usual..lol

overall: was dope, only problem... the bar length, shorten it...8/10