O'kay O'kay
This is what you done well...You dropped your thoughts directly and that must of meant alot to you...I heard what you was saying
I think your vocab fell of a bit...You repeated the same rhyme twice in such a small amount of text.. : )
Next time i'd like to see you write a bit more, I think it would make it that much better because your thoughts and ideas would be dropped more clearly
Pz...
