that first kid shud be shot....

anyway....like most of your pieces i was feeling this

enjoyed the whole thing and didnt have to force myself to read it like alot of verses
the imagery was spot on for this piece...and the sentences linked together really well..ie they all had a relative point
agree with your views on the topic...which helped but it was an overall solid verse...not classic but good

'Are there solutions? Can we salvage years of embracing the dead?
Can we claim what's rightfully ours and take back the space in our head
^although simple in many parts the view point and expression is really good
liked this line..people seem to have become robots to society...

plenty of quotables...vocab was solid..flow good...and u expressed yourself well in a simple but thought provoking format
props